"The universe is made of stories, not of atoms."
—Muriel Rukeyser
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So you want to write a screenplay?

The following is an excellent piece by Barry Pearson "16 Ways You Can Create a Better Hero and a Better Screenplay"

Shakespeare created many of the most memorable heroes in the English language. We acknowledge him as an artistic genius. But the Bard was also the most financially successful writer of his time. Even in modern times, tidy fortunes are made from retreading his work.

One of the keys to his extraordinary success is to be found in this trenchant and insightful quote form Dr. Samuel Johnson, who published a definitive edition of his plays in 1765.

The stage but echoes back the public voice
The drama's laws, the drama's patrons give.
For we that live to please must please to live

That one is worth pinning on your wall. It's as true for you as it was 400 years ago when Shakespeare was penning his audience-pleasing masterpieces. Writing stories that will satisfy the desires of your audience can lead directly to your success.

Moviegoers, like the Globe theatergoers in 1600, have definite and strong desires about what they want in a hero. and they vote with their feet and their wallets.

You will write better heroes and better screenplays if you use the audience's desires as your writing "laws." What are those desires? And how can you tap into them? I'm going to suggest sixteen types of audience desires, both positive and negative, that may be helpful. I'll try to illustrate with examples of what audiences want (or do not want) and what you can do about it.

1. The audience wants the Hero to be forced to struggle, change, and become a better, happier, and more successful person.

Professional screenwriters recognize this want and take ingenious steps to exploit it. Have you ever noticed that heroes at the beginning of a movie are stuck in a rut? They're usually in a state of paralysis (literally or figuratively). They're often imprisoned in some way. In Gladiator, for example, Maximus (Russell Crowe) starts out trapped in a miasma of political intrigue, and progresses to a literal state of imprisonment and despair.

By portraying this admirable hero so far from "happy and successful," the writers intensified the audience's desire to see him struggle toward justice and freedom.

Try to imagine how your Hero, at the beginning of your movie, could be in a state of paralysis, unable to act.

Perhaps she might be like Angela Bennett (Sandra Bullock) in The Net. Angela, in retreat from a hurtful love affair shrinks from human contact. She has woven a protective cocoon around herself and forged the bars of her own prison.

Then again, your Hero might be "imprisoned" like William Broyles Jr.'s hero Chuck Nolan (Tom Hanks) in Castaway. Chuck is so obsessed by the deadline culture of his job that he has become a barely human automaton.

2. The audience wants the Hero to exhibit a sense of humor.

This is a simple but important desire to satisfy. You don't need a gag writer. Audiences respond positively to self-deprecating or ironic humor. When Angela Bennett is accused of not being a risk-taker, she counters that she does like risks: she doesn't always floss, and she tears the labels off her mattresses. Try to make your Hero exhibit a sense of humor as soon as possible.

3. The audience wants the Hero to have bigger-than-life dreams and desires.

Maximus dreams of winning his freedom as a gladiator, and of bringing down the regime of the murderous usurper, Commodus, and freeing Rome. What dreams and desires (perhaps secret) can your Hero develop to satisfy this audience desire?

4. Moviegoers want the Hero to believe in (and act according to) the basic set of values that they believe in.

In Titanic Jack Dawson (Leonardo DiCaprio) believes that a poor sincere artist should be true to his inner calling. He believes in the value of life. He believes that true love should triumph over class barriers and financial considerations. He believes in heroism to save a human life. These are all values that North American movigoers believe in.


Dirty Harry believes that a cop should not follow regulations if it's a case of protecting the honest citizenry from the scum that infest the streets.

What are your Hero's values? Are those values shared by the majority of the audience? Take your best shot.

5. The audience wants the Hero to struggle to overcome increasingly more difficult obstacles.

In Analyze This, written by Kenneth Lonergan (and others), Dr. Sobel (Billy Crystal) tries to get out of treating a depressed mob boss (Robert De Niro). At first, there are meetings in offices, and chases around a hotel, but the obstacles escalate, until Sobel finds himself pinned down by a hail of lead in a waterfront shoot-out.


Is your Hero's struggle escalating to the utmost level consistent with the premise?

6. The audience wants the Hero to take on an opponent who is more powerful and successful than the hero.

Erin Brockovich takes on the chemical company, Jeffrey Wigand takes on the tobacco cartel (The Insider), Angela Bennett takes on the wealthy megalomaniac computer baron, Chuck Noland takes on the ocean, and Luke Skywalker takes on the galactic forces of evil.

Some movies -- romantic comedies mostly -- don't have an antagonist or opponent in the typical sense. The opponent is the person whose love the hero needs to win, As Good As It Gets, When Harry Met Sally, Pretty Woman, Bridges of Madison County -- in movies like these, the gulf between the hero and the loved one seems to be more powerful than the hero.

What about the opponent for your Hero? Is he or she as daunting as you can imagine?

7. Moviegoers want the Hero to play for high stakes, some outcome, or ideal, or benefit that they believe is supremely important.

What's at stake in your Hero's struggle? Will your audience believe in its importance? Is it life or death? Is it the integrity of the community? Is it winning the only woman (or man) for the hero, as in a love story?

8. Moviegoers want the Hero to be forced to undertake frightening and difficult tasks which they would not willingly undertake themselves.

This is the "don't go down in the basement!" syndrome. Nobody in their right mind would go down in the basement after a serial killer the way Clarice Starling (Jodie Foster) does in Silence of the Lambs. But it's exactly what the audience wants her to do -- because she's the hero.

9. The audience wants to believe that the Hero can win. They don't want to be sure that the Hero will win.

John Book (Harrison Ford), the hero of Witness faces three lethal, armed killers who invade the Lapp farm. Book, although a trained police officer, has no weapons. The audience is on tenterhooks through the whole final sequence. They believe he can overcome the villains, but they have no idea how he will do it.

10. The audience wants the Hero to face his or her worst fears.

In the final sequence of The Terminator, James Cameron's breakthrough movie, the hero, Sarah Connor (Linda Hamilton) faces the robotic relentless killing machine all alone. Her worst nightmare has become a reality. What's your Hero's deepest fear? Use it.

11. The audience wants the Hero to escape death (literal or figurative) by means of strength of character, persistence, cleverness and courage, not raw strength.

The quintessential example of a writer manipulating this audience desire occurs in William Goldman's Butch Cassidy and The Sundance Kid. The heroes find themselves trapped at the edge of a cliff, with the posse closing in. Instead of surrendering, they jump off the cliff into the river below.

How many of these types of moments can you set up for your hero?

12. The audience wants the Hero to win the prize at the end of the movie.

At the end of Working Girl, Tess McGill (Melanie Griffith) wins her dream job and finds herself in the corner office. What's the prize for your Hero?

13. The audience does not want the Hero to be lucky, unless the luck is caused by the hero's cunning or provident preparation.

In the final battle of Star Wars, it could be argued that Luke Skywalker "gets lucky" when he destroys the Death Star. In fact audiences readily accepted his good luck, because they had shared his hours of preparation with Obi Wan Kenobi.

14. The audience does not want the Hero to be able to quit, to abandon the task he or she has undertaken.

You need to create good reasons why your Hero cannot quit. In Robert Towne's superb detective story Chinatown, Jake (Jack Nicholson) cannot quit because he has a score to settle with the villain, and because he's fallen in love with Evelyn Mulwray (Faye Dunaway), whose husband was murdered.

15. The audience does not want to have its expectations fulfilled.

It wants to be surprised. So don't let your Hero do what the audience expects him or her to do. Write against the expectations of the audience, or have the expectations fulfilled but in a totally unexpected way.

16. The audience doesn't want the Hero to be motivated by base selfish desires.

Audiences dislike base selfish desires like greed. They like admirable selfish desires like striving for achievement (to become a great opera star, or head of the company, or discoverer of Insulin).

They dislike base selfish desires like pure revenge. They like admirable selfish desires like wanting to redress an injustice one has suffered.

They love unselfish desires like wanting to redress an injustice others have suffered, so as to make the world a better place to live.

Caution: This does not mean that you should never create heroes with base selfish motives.

You can often create great tension and catharsis in an audience through heroes with base selfish motives. Four good examples from different eras: Macbeth, The Treasure of the Sierra Madre, Goodfellas and My Best Friend's Wedding.

Try to imagine all the ways in which you can satisfy the audience's desires and avoid (or manipulate) the audience's dislikes at every moment of your movie.

Try to put in as as many audience-satisfying moments as possible. Put them in on top of each other if you can.

As you write, plan how you can satisfy your audience in some way on every page. Of course all those other elements -- plot, theme, dialogue, cast of characters and structure -- are important, but the most important task for you is to give the audience what they came to the theater for -- satisfaction.

Tip for the day: Keep moving forward despite your moods.


For someone that is new to the business of writing screenplays, the term "treatment" will most definitely be new to them as well. Basically, if a writer has an idea for a story but for one reason or another does not want to write an entire script, they'll need to know about treatments.

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I welcome your comments, questions, and discussion.

HOLLYWOOD TO HOLLYWOOD

I’ll be chairing a panel, "Inside Hollywood at the EMMYS: The Reel Path to Screenwriting Success in Film and Television." This panel will consider advanced l business and legal issues relating to the critical need to create the correct approach in advising a client on the development of screenplays, teleplays or documentaries for film and television. It will be between Noon -12:50 PM on September 20, 2008, as part of the national seminar "From Hollywood to Hollywood: EASL at the EMMYS TM, presented by The Florida Bar Entertainment, Arts & Sports Law Section (EASL) at the Beverly Hilton Hotel. Write Richard W. Rappaport, Esq., Adorno & Yoss LLP, Miami, (rwr@adorno.com ) for information about attending. Click here for more information. Hope to see you there!

DEMON EATER!

Royce Buckingham’s sequel to DemonKeeper, DemonEater, appears from Random House Germany next year. Their Penhaligon catalog features one of the monsters from Royce’s demonic zoo. Click to tour the catalog and meet the monster!

Goblins! - First review

Our first review of GOBLINS! is in – here is the review from Kirkus, calling it “a riotously good adventure!”

Buckingham, Royce
GOBLINS!: An UnderEarth Adventure

Young protagonist Sam thinks living in Sumas, Wash., is 8 0…like growing up in a rural coma.” He and bad boy PJ (son of Sumas’s only cop) quickly learn how wrong he is when the boys accidentally run over an apelike creature sporting tusks, fur and a spiked club. They take it back to PJ’s father’s jailhouse, but are confronted by an albino man and a young woman who take charge of the creature. Following these strangers down a trap door in the forest, they discover a network of tunnels and caves filled with man-eating grass, giant insects and hungry goblins. These human guardians have held the goblins in check, but the boys’ intrusion disturbs the balance. Sam and PJ must use their wits to outsmart the sometimes amusingly stupid but also incredibly adaptable goblins. The final pages detail a massive battle where blood and goo are spilled, alliances change and heroes are made. Mild rough language makes an occasional appearance throughout this sometimes violent and often slimy tale, which races along and makes for a riotously good adventure. (Fiction. 9-13)

newsblip

Noire was featured in PW’s cover story, “The New E-in Erotica,” by Sarah J. Robbins, along with the cover of her first anthology, From the Streets to the Sheets, and this comment from her Ballantine editor: “According to Ballantine senior editor Melody Guy, one reason for the category’s success is the authors’ promotional savvy. At Ballantine’s One World imprint, the biggest erotica author, says Guy, is ‘far and away Noire,’ whose 2005 debut novel, G-Spot, continues to backlist strongly. Coming next month is a story collection, From the Streets to the Sheets: Urban Erotic Quickies, which will be followed next spring by Hittin’ the Bricks, also a forthcoming Noire movie. Noire’s popularity, says Guy, ‘steams from the fact that she combined two genres in a way that no one else had—street lit and erotica—and appealed to fans of both genres.’ She also, Guy adds, has a team of fans across the country that helps to promote her books, and she has a significant online presence…”

“The Un-Dead” May Move to Hungary

Very exciting developments on Ian Holt’s script “The Un-Dead,” based on the novel by Dacre Stoker and Ian. We are in discussions with Raleigh Studios/Hungary about shooting the film there. Their art department has done some awesome preparation to show us how the mood of the story can be captured perfectly over there (see it here). More to follow.

UNA VIDA MOVES FORWARD

The last few weeks have brought the delightful news that my good friend and client Nick Bazan, M.D.’s novel and film, UNA VIDA, are both moving forward at last. The novel—check out this great cover—will appear end of the year from Five Star Publications, with Linda Radke, the publisher, hugely excited about its potential and Leeza Gibbons’ “Leeza’s Place,” dedicate to the families of Alzheimer’s victims, exploring a cross-promotional tie in with Dr. Bazan, who heads LSU’s Neuroscience Institute in New Orleans.

The story is a neuroscientist’s journey to discover, in the labyrinth of New Orleans culture, the labyrinthine pathways of the human mind by pursuing a mysterious musician whose voice remains enchanting despite the ravages of Alzheimer’s. Through clear dreams and obscure realities, the serendipitous quest of Dr. Alvaro Cruz leads to a breakthrough in Una Vida’s life and in his own as well.

At the same time that the novel is moving forward, Alan Roth, AEI client and creator of “Hang Time” and “One More for the Road,” is working on the “Una Vida” screenplay with Nick—hoping to have it ready for proceeding with the film in New Orleans at the first of the new year as well.

Stay tuned to my blog for more updates, and meanwhile check out Dr. Bazan’s UNA VIDA blog page here.

For more on Dr. Bazan’s groundbreaking scientific research, see his LSU page here.

“… a hero’s journey that leads a haunted neuroscientist through the mystery of jazz, the alleys of New Orleans … and the labyrinth of the mind.”

– Leeza Gibbons, founder of Leeza’s Place for the families of Alzheimer’s victims

WHAT IS THIS BOOK ABOUT?

In Dr. Nicolas Bazan’s brilliant first novel, neuroscientist Alvaro Cruz finds himself haunted by a recurring dream of a banjo player in an elusive cornfield that leads him on a personal quest to uncover the mysterious past of a New Orleans street singer known as Una Vida. Stricken with Alzheimer’s, Una Vida can only offer tantalizing clues about her past through her mesmerizing vocals, incredible recollection of jazz lyrics, and the occasional verbal revisiting of a fascinating life that’s fading quickly and forever into the recess of her mind. As Cruz searches for Una Vida’s true identity, he learns profound lessons about the human psyche, the nature of memory – and himself.

WHAT MAKES THIS BOOK UNIQUE?

Una Vida is filled with delightful twists and unexpected turns, all centering around one of the greatest gifts New Orleans has offered the world – jazz. But the story will also deeply touch anyone who has had to witness the heartbreaking deterioration of a loved one’s memory as it is consumed by the unforgiving encroachment of Alzheimer’s.

In the end, Una Vida represents a triumph of the spirit and sends an intensely personal message of hope to the world even as scientists like Dr. Bazan continue the search for the answers to one of life’s most devastating diseases.

Gather Together In My Name by Tracy Price-Thompson


Okay, the wait is over! GATHER TOGETHER IN MY NAME is yet another one just like the other one(s). Rare would you find a Tracy Price-Thompson written novel devoid of dramatic poignancy and verve. Based on her previous work relative to my reviews and others that pay homage to good writing, I’ve come to know this author well in this regard. Each book has its own juices that marinate with the spices that hit the literary palette. If you thought BLACK COFFEE, CHOCOLATE SANGRIA, and A WOMAN’S WORTH were stellar, wait until you witness the trial and tribulation of Shyne Blackwood. Shyne’s incredible story is told against the backdrop of a triumvirate that gives the story different shades of coloring where the author exudes every ounce of intrigue to keep you guessing as each scene is dependent on what’s destined to happen next. Loyalty, love and a sordid sense of loathing drives this story.

The setting is a crime-ridden Brooklyn that adds a synonymous layer that the author takes advantage of by blending of a set of triplets born into poverty and great consternation. The boys - Gabriel (Shug), Isaiah (Shyne) and Ezekiel (Shadow) are introduced in alternating chapters as the author weaves a fabric rough at times, but with enough traction that it moves along gathering tone and tenor for a climatic, if not surprising end. Is love and loyalty worth dying for where hate is circling in the midst waiting to claim another victim? The author sets the tone when a gristly rape and murder is committed on a young woman and her three year-old daughter. Who dunnit? Two of the three brothers are interwoven into this tale as Shadow meets an early untimely death of his own. Was it Shug, a momma’s boy and his mother's favorite, who is an intellect, law-trained and a politically savvy individual bidding to become the second black mayor of New York City; or the snake-bitten Shyne, who is a street-seasoned hustler, thief and seemingly someone only the next door neighbor can love that committed the crime?

I read this story with much trepidation recalling the plight of so many Black men sentenced to lives that are stereotypical of some of them being in the wrong place at the wrong time. As you read this story you will want the author to give it practical familiarity by allowing readers to come to the conclusion that may be obvious, but certain twists keeps the suspense riveting! As such, one of the brothers are accused and convicted of the brutal murders, and everyone demands vengeance as death row becomes his next place of residence. The coda gains momentum on the eve of Shyne's execution, when five people travel to the jail to witness the event. Redemption can be defined only when intrusive meaning is worthy of holding on to an unshakeable feeling. In tick-tock fashion the culprit is good as gone, but the adhesiveness of loyalty rears its head to reveal a secret that will test the bonds of familial order, the strength of one man's character, and the all encompassing power of a love worth dying for mentioned earlier. If you manage to gather together for the sake of a good read, then do so by naming and claiming this author as one of the best in guaranteed page-turning delight! Tracy, when is the next one due out?

Reviewed by Alvin C. Romer for The Romer Review

Demonkeeper in Germany


Check out the Random House Germany Penhaligon site here featuring Royce Buckingham and Demonkeeper (Dämliche Dämonen).